Saturday, 11 February 2017

Promises



Promises

Pratap walked into his cabin with a smile on his face. Last night he had finally accepted his feelings for musibat. The kiss was amazing but it was her response that made him smile, her throwing away the ring and kissing him senseless was her way of showing her feelings and acceptance. He opened his Mac Book to work when Heer and Shakti walked into his cabin.

“Dadabhai is it true?” Heer asked a little choky “Jija chali gayi?” Pratap looked at Heer who seemed on the verge of tears so he stood up and gestured his brother to get some water for her.

“Heer, she had to go usko koi zaroori kaam tha isiliye” he reasoned with her but Heer held his hand, “aise kaunsa kaam tha Dadabhai I need her- presentation aane waala hai and I’m scared ki kuch wrong ho gaya toh…Jija hoti hain toh sab accha hota hai and shaadi ke liye bhi toh unko rukna chahiye tha”

Pratap rubbed her head soothingly; “I assure you Heer ki tumhaare presentation bahut accha jaayega after all  tumhaare paas Raja ji hain, Ranisa hain, Manjhli Maa hain, Shakti hai and main bhi hoon. I’m sure Ajabde bhi tumhaare success ki hi pray kar rahi hogi.”

“Dadabhai” she asked softly “ jija waapis aayengi na?” Pratap looked at her as he smiled “zaroor aayengi and agar thoda sa bhi late kiya toh hum lene jaayenge tumhaari Jija ko this is my promise to you”

“Sacchi Dadabhai?” Heer said while Shakti’s eyes wide as his brother nodded his head while his fiance hugged him. He sent the two away to work but instead of working he took out the letter his musibat had left for him.






Mere Dear Kharus Kunwar, 

Oh shit that rhymed! 

Main jaa rahi hoon kyunki time aa gaya hai ki I face meri problems head on. Dekho mere jaane ke baad please Devdas mat ban jaana because mere Daata is not a fan and frankly speaking mereko bhi nahi pasand hai. Sing a song daily for Manjhali Maa and Shakti. You are the first guy Jisko apna correct number de rahi hoon- use karna warna as you know mujhe fight karna aata hai aur pranks khelna bhi :P
I’ll wait for you- time par aa jaana warna aage jo hoga uske zimmedaar tum honge and next time jab miloge toh I’m expecting a gift!

From
 Tumhaari musibat


Ramrakh Punwar smiled seeing his daughter take charge of the most crucial event for the Punwars. He thought he had been dreaming when he found his daughter waiting for him in his cabin. She had changed he realised as he saw her direct her team for last minute tasks. His daughter looked grown up and happier than she was at time of her marriage with Tota, a scowl appeared on his face as he thought of that fool. He had turned up at their residence questioning him on his absence of his name from the final contenders. That had been a really short and crisp talk.

“Your name is not on the list because you failed to submit the draft ToranMal”

A knock on the door made him come out of his thoughts; his daughter peeked inside, “Daata there are a few changes we should go over” he nodded his head  as she entered with her laptop and her team as they sat down to finalise everything. 

Sajja Bai couldn’t believe her stars as Shakti narrated the entire incident at the office to her word by word
“And then Dadabhai bole ki hum lene jaayenge aapki Jija ko;” he smiled seeing her Manjhali Maa.

She shook her head as a stray tear rolled down her cheek, they had been waiting too long for this moment, for their Kunwar Pratap to return to them and the occasion had finally arrived. She called the cooks and instructed them to make all of Pratap’s favourite dishes but the cooks looked at each other a little unsure

“Ranisa” one of them began “we apologise but we have been given strict instructions to not cook anything for dinner today.” Sajja Bai ji looked at Shakti who looked as lost as she was

“Who gave you these instructions?” He asked no one in particular when his brother’s voice rang out

“I told them not to cook anything” he said folding the sleeves of his shirt “because tonight is the kitchen takeover night and Kunwar Shakti I expect you to be there as my sous chef”

Seeing Pratap’s old smile, sparkle in his eyes Sajja couldn’t control herself as she hugged him tight.

“Aaj hum bahut khush hain…. Promise ki jiyee aap aisehi rahenge hamesha” she sobbed as Pratap held her tight

“I promise Manjhali Maa aapka Pratap aapke paas hi rahega”

Ajabde lay in her childhood room scowling at her phone, kharus Kunwar ek bhi message nahi kiya ab tak. Itna bhi kya busy hona ki message nahi karo. Even I won’t message him she thought to herself and placed the cell on the bedside table. She had closed her eyes for a minute when the notification bell rang off making her eyes open wide, she reached for her cell only to entangle herself in the bed covers and fell on the floor, laughing she clicked open Whatsapp to see a video message.

It was a short video of Pratap singing as everyone around him smiled;

Jab Koi Baat Bigad Jaaye
Jab Koi Mushkil Pad Jaaye
Tum Dena Saath Mera
O Humnawaaz
Naa Koi Hai
Na Koi Tha
Zindage Mein Tumhaare Siva
Tum Dena Saath Mera
O Humnawaaz



She smiled as she caressed his content face when she received another message, this time it was from Heer; it was taken in the kitchen on the Songara haveli. Shakti sat on the counter eating carrot while Sajja sat laughing at some joke while her Kharus Kunwar stood smiling stirring something on the stove.

Aaj ka dinner special Heer wrote khichdi with kheer as she posted a pic of the dinner.

Ajabde smiled as she responded to the messages, looks yummy.

Hi Musib… he stopped and erased the message again. Pratap stared at the blank message space of his Whatsapp that showed his musibat was online

“Online hai par message nahi kar sakti” he thought “saare steps Pehle mujhe hi lene padenge kya?”

And then an idea popped in his head as he sent her a dancing emoji followed by a kiss and then a hug emoji. Seeing the blue ticks a smile appeared on his face as he typed

Kuch yaad aaya?

She saw his message and responded, raat ko mera memory test le rahe ho Kharus Kunwar?

Pratap’s response made her blush

Check kar raha hoon ki tum laal hui ki nahi…waise kisi ki yaad nahi aa rahi tumko

Ajabde smiled as she typed, maine bhi miss kiya she stopped as she saw him send her question marks

Aa rahi hai na manjhali maa ki, Heer ki, Shakti ki, chetak ki…

And his response was instant “aur kisko miss kiya Miss Musibat?” Her response had him smile like crazy,

Kharus Kunwar ko bhi kiya miss…good night

11 comments:

  1. Wow it was awesome update....amazing...waiting for the next

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  2. Wow this was even better then the previous one!!!

    His love and commitment gave her the strength to head back home and do what was needed. More so her being self content gave her the reason to set things right back home. Same was for Pratap. It was wonderful he didnt sulk on her leaving with the letter. After all she made him equally self content. They were physically away but just so so near each other... Good that Ajab did put it all in black n white in the letter as to how he should be behind her leaving him a sense of belonging towards her which he missed in all those sulking years

    Oh Heer dont worry your jija cant go anywhere... N Shakti you make me wanna have a brother like you.

    Bhai Tota please koi raita nahi failana or u r gonna be punished badly! Loving the co che co between Praja and Shakti would definitely faint if he reads his brothers recent whatsapp msgs ;)

    Now waiting badly for he meeting. But somehow I feel there was a conversation between Praja post they made out....

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    1. Suju di

      Thank you so much
      You look at their relationship in ways I didn't think off. Both are each other's strength

      Tota won't do anything he won't be able to stand the glare of Kunwar Pratap :P

      Shakti would faint and then tell on his brother and faint again

      Post kiss convo- we'll have to see that

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    2. Your comment makes me go gaga 😍

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  3. Awesome girls...!!!!
    Was smiling throughout the whole update...

    Ab tak aapne dekha...:

    Acceptance of feelings... Flattering..!!!
    Pratap's both the promises...Thumbs up...!
    Musibat's letter...Hatke and amusing...!!
    Their effect on each other... Strength to head on and content...!!!!!
    Song selection... Just Perfect...!!
    PrAja's chat...Smart job darlings..!!!

    Because of u, we fell in love with the Kheer, Pratu....!!
    How I wish HeerTi in my life too...!

    I'm so so loving this story...Surima...!!!!
    Oops...Look what I've done...!! Hope u won't mind *winks
    Ha ha...I'm so happy with u fantastic writers.....!!!

    MaDiee

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    1. Hi MaDiee

      am happy you enjoyed the updated

      Surima!!- I like it :D

      Glad we could make you love the story

      Thanks!!

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    2. Ay hay now we have a writer name Garima ❤ am so glad. Thank you!

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  4. Awesome lovelyy part waiting for next

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  5. I LOVE LOVE D UPDATE!!!!!!!!! IT WAZ AWESOME......... LOVING DIS PRATAP A LOT........ MSG CONVO. BETWEEN AJAB ND PRATAP WAZ SO CUTE........... EACH PART IZ BETTER THAN PREVIOUS ONE..........

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